Did you know that room 8 made home made butter? We used a pinch of salt and cream, we put in the pinch of salt into the jar with the cream and then we all got into a big circle. Then we all got to shake the jar until the cream was thick and smooth. When it looked thick and smooth we got split into groups of 4 and then we got a piece of bread and tasted it.
When I tasted the butter, the butter tasted like normal butter but it has a more interesting tasty. The taste was a yum tangy taste and was Delicious.
That is how you make home made BUTTER!
I agree your introduction is clear, we just need to work on hooking in your reader. Try and use some of the techniques we have been practising in class Aliyah.
ReplyDeleteWhere are your paragraphs after the introduction? Remember to separate them out.